Thursday, October 4, 2012

Final goodbye..




"I tried. But nothing is working anymore and I can't see you like this." He tried to justify.

She didn't react. 

He looked at her, with tears in his eyes, also with the last shreds of hope. But he should have known better.

She still didn't budge, not even now, not even as they said their final goodbye...

"I am sorry" he said as he watched them unplug the ventilator.




22 comments:

  1. Incredibly poignant. Ageless pain narrated in five lines

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  2. So many things in few lines.

    Important thing about the story,i feel,is that reader should not be able to interpret the end of the story. And you kept it very well. Every line make you interpret a different story and in the end, it something very unexpected.

    Incredibly brilliant !!!

    The Awesome Upasana :)

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  3. Short, crisp and hard hitting! Lovely!

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  4. Good one!!

    http://rajniranjandas.blogspot.in/2012/10/gokarna-ten-things-to-dosee.html

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  5. took sometime to realize what i am reading... touching

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  6. This is really interesting…
    Rosesandgifts.com

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  7. a heart braking piece, Upasana...

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  8. Wow Upasana.
    The last line completely turned everything around. feelings very aptly depicted in this post of few lines :)
    Keep posting :)

    Regards,

    Jay
    http://road-to-sanitarium.blogspot.in/

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  9. Quite a lot of pain in those few words.

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  10. Very, very well written, Upasana. Keep at it.

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