Final goodbye..

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"I tried. But nothing is working anymore and I can't see you like this." He tried to justify.

She didn't react. 

He looked at her, with tears in his eyes, also with the last shreds of hope. But he should have known better.

She still didn't budge, not even now, not even as they said their final goodbye...

"I am sorry" he said as he watched them unplug the ventilator.




Comments

  1. Anupam PatraOctober 4, 2012 at 8:40 PM

    Incredibly poignant. Ageless pain narrated in five lines

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  2. Mohit UdhwaniOctober 5, 2012 at 8:31 AM

    So many things in few lines.

    Important thing about the story,i feel,is that reader should not be able to interpret the end of the story. And you kept it very well. Every line make you interpret a different story and in the end, it something very unexpected.

    Incredibly brilliant !!!

    The Awesome Upasana :)

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  3. magiceyeOctober 5, 2012 at 1:18 PM

    Short, crisp and hard hitting! Lovely!

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  4. R Niranjan DasOctober 5, 2012 at 1:25 PM

    Good one!!

    http://rajniranjandas.blogspot.in/2012/10/gokarna-ten-things-to-dosee.html

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  5. sathishOctober 5, 2012 at 10:03 PM

    took sometime to realize what i am reading... touching

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  6. RachnaOctober 6, 2012 at 10:55 AM

    oh how heartbreaking!

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  7. PanchaliOctober 7, 2012 at 2:34 PM

    a heart braking piece, Upasana...

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  8. provoqdOctober 8, 2012 at 12:05 AM

    Wow Upasana.
    The last line completely turned everything around. feelings very aptly depicted in this post of few lines :)
    Keep posting :)

    Regards,

    Jay
    http://road-to-sanitarium.blogspot.in/

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  9. vinayOctober 9, 2012 at 5:30 PM

    Quite a lot of pain in those few words.

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  10. subhorup dasguptaOctober 11, 2012 at 4:44 AM

    Very, very well written, Upasana. Keep at it.

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